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Post by Marshall on Jan 12, 2009 9:26:23 GMT -5
Just a little tweak here. I played this at another song circle and got similar comments about the last verse coming out of the blue. Though the song is coming along nicely in presentation. I've played it out a couple times, and I enjoy doing it and it works as well as anything.
Nevertheless, I've decided to make one simple change. I'm swapping out:
Barbaro thrilled us with his Derby run
with:
The racehorse Barabro had a great Derby run.
I'm figuring that will introduce the verse better than dropping out of the bridge into a whole new story. And I've developed a chatty introduction to the song that lets the audience know that there's a racehorse analogy coming in the song.
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