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Post by Russell Letson on Feb 24, 2020 15:54:02 GMT -5
--on my wife. Me, I got nothin'. www.matchbooklitmag.com/abartis2Written on a kind of dare, as many workshop prompts turn out to be. (For example, the one that generated Marshall's Rutabaga song.) |
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Post by Cornflake on Feb 24, 2020 15:58:46 GMT -5
Well done. Was the dare to write a story in a single sentence?
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Post by david on Feb 24, 2020 16:02:48 GMT -5
I am out of breath - but nice, stream of consciousness, story.
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Post by millring on Feb 24, 2020 16:06:39 GMT -5
I love it.
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Post by fauxmaha on Feb 24, 2020 16:23:20 GMT -5
That's exhausting, which I gather is pretty much the point. So well done!
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Post by TKennedy on Feb 24, 2020 16:24:55 GMT -5
That’s the way a kid thinks, it’d work for a dog story too.
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Post by coachdoc on Feb 24, 2020 16:31:48 GMT -5
Boy,I read this story today, it was so good, but it was of a girl, so I shouldn't relate, but golly, it sounded just like when we boys would push and shove, and argue 'safe' no 'out' so I'll take my ball home but I still want to play, can I swear?
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Post by Village Idiot on Feb 24, 2020 19:01:43 GMT -5
Me too. But on the other hand it doesn't surprise me at all that she did this so well, because the conclusion I've come to from reading other works of hers over the years is that she's a master of brevity and expert at condensing five paragraphs into one, so wonderfully illustrated here by rendering the character's entire thought process down to one sentence. |
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Post by billhammond on Feb 24, 2020 19:08:22 GMT -5
Love it, even with editor fingers twitching.  |
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Post by drlj on Feb 24, 2020 19:09:13 GMT -5
Extra cool.
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