One of the timeless themes

[Cornflake]

A rocker, mostly I--VIIb--IV--V.

At the hop you weren’t wearing socks
Your boogalooing sure was fine
I saw you smile at one of the jocks
Did you forget that you were mine?

Mary Jo, where did you go?
I’ve been looking low and high
Mary Jo, I want to know--
Were you dancing with another guy?

Last I knew he was talking to you
Then just like that I was alone
I searched inside and outside too
Coulda sworn I heard some bushes moan

Mary Jo, where did you go?
I’ve been looking low and high
Mary Jo, I want to know--
Were you dancing with another guy?

You reappeared with twigs in your hair
And smudges on your new pink dress
You had a grin I didn’t put there
And your lipstick was a mess

Mary Jo, where did you go?
I’ve been looking low and high
Mary Jo, I want to know--
Were you dancing with another guy?

[Deleted]

it's been a while sir flake. i'm going to start this with a disclaimer, not unlike the ones i have received.

it's quite likely that i know nothing of songwriting. i am young and full of folly. what i'm about to say is not necessarily correct, and is only an opinion. in all probability, i may be missing something, and quite conceivably am horribly wrong.

although there are many good lines, images, and ideas, the song as a whole seems clumsy and, at times, a bit rushed. though it's quite possibly something that has happened to you or someone you know, it feels like you sat down with the intention of writing a song, and this was what came out.

as we've said before, it's very difficult to gauge a song out of context, so to speak. i'm sure if i heard it, i could well be of a different opinion, but as it is i think it is lacking in the feeling that you normally give your songs.

again, i could well be wrong, and if you like it, best of luck with it, but you can (and have) written infinitely better songs.

[Cornflake]

It was meant to be humorous only, Connington, and probably failed. I'm not offended. Thanks for the comments.

[Deleted]

sorry for missing that.

[Cornflake]

No apology due. If the humor doesn't come through, it's obviously not a very good song. I write lots that aren't.

[Deleted]

this is the first i've seen. and i don't have a sense of humour anyway, so don't mind me.

[dradtke]

So Ole and Lena go the the barn dance with their friend Sven. They're all drinking and dancing, and then Ole notices that Lena and Sven are missing. He looks all over inside and can't find them, so he goes outside and looks around. Eventually he finds them smooching in the dark behind the barn.

Ole starts laughing and laughing. "Look at that Sven! He's so drunk he tinks he's me!"